After reviewing the second draft of my script I wasn’t happy with the way the height of tension (letter arrival) was delivered to the audience. So I decided to change some of the events that occurred throughout my intro.
The build up to the post arriving needed to be spaced out, so I added more shots of Marnie running up the stairs grabbing her coursework from her neat desk and running back down again. This would show aspects of Marnie’s personality and therefore achieve the micro to macro representation of the character.
More attention needed to be paid to the post arrival, this along with the build up to the post arrival made it stand out to the audience. It was important to connote how important the post was to the storyline and the characters within my intro.
I could also see a pattern within my writing. It wasn’t ‘WYSIWYG’ and I was narrating the intro through the interior thought mode of my main character, Marnie. So I changed the writing style of the script to make it clearer for when I put my script into action with my storyboard.
Once I had my structure of my story where I was happy with it I inserted the production credits and film title where I felt was appropriate for my intro. I wanted to insert the film title after the action that finished with Marnie putting the envelope in her bag and walking down the road. As it was a continuous setting of Marnie’s house I didn’t want to break up that action sequence. So I added an extra scene after the film title was shown, in which Marnie was sitting in a park and she finally read the letter, this would keep the story moving on, and keep to the aspects of an intro.
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